Revisions

Before: The Effective Altruism believe in good deeds that help. They believe that if a person does enough good deeds they become good. “In equation form, Your Apparent Good Achieved minus the Good Your Counterfactual Replacement Would Have Achieved equals Your Actual Good Achieved”. The amount of good a person does should not be calculated it should be done out of kindness not competition. Being able to be replaced by someone who can give more and do more good deeds, does not make people want to stop suffering it takes the point out of doing good away. People who express themselves and show the care and want to stop suffering in different ways. Showing the pain of the suffering through media outlets and art is doing a good deed like donating money. The good artists bring to the table is not the same as donating a lot of money but it can be more impactful on others. Art shows emotions and allows the public to form opinions. Progressive art is helpful but the EAs still believe it is a waste.

After: The Effective Altruism believe in good deeds that help the suffering world. They believe that if a person does enough good deeds they become good. “In equation form, Your Apparent Good Achieved minus the Good Your Counterfactual Replacement Would Have Achieved equals Your Actual Good Achieved”. The amount of good a person does should not be calculated it should be done out of kindness not competition. Being able to be replaced by someone who can give more and do more good deeds, does not make people want to stop suffering it takes the point out of doing good away. People express themselves and show they care and want to stop suffering in different ways. Getting your hands dirty and being on the ground can be more beneficial then just donating money to a charity. Showing the pain of the suffering through media outlets and art is doing a good deed like donating money. The good artists bring to the table is not the same as donating a lot of money but it can be more impactful on others. Art shows emotions and allows the public to form opinions. Progressive art is helpful but the EAs still believe it is a waste.

Before: The Ted Talk, “how can we address centuries of racism in art” by Titus Kaphar makes the point of showing how art can allow personal connections.  Kaphar told a story of how his nine year old son asked why the Native American and African American had to walk while the white man could ride the horse. He noticed this while looking at a sculpture. That piece of art says a lot about American History and can start conversations and questions. Children even form questions and opinions by looking at artwork. While looking at the painting Titus Kaphar took apart the painting and explained how we could learn things from it. For example, he talked about how our eyes are trained to look at the white male first and see the women and her clothing to judge the status of the family. But the viewers eyes ignore the African American child who is placed further back in the painting, hidden like a shadow. Kaphar explains how the public can learn about the white people in the painting but the painting tells us nothing about the boy and his life.  Kaphar talks about how painting is a language and that in paintings are coded and meaningful messages.

After: The Ted Talk, “how can we address centuries of racism in art” by Titus Kaphar makes the point of showing how art can allow personal connections. Art impacts people through emotions and how an image makes you feel. Kaphar told a story of how his nine year old son asked why the Native American and African American had to walk while the white man could ride the horse. He noticed this while looking at a sculpture. That piece of art says a lot about American History and can start conversations and questions. Children even form questions and opinions by looking at artwork. While looking at the painting Titus Kaphar took apart the painting and explained how we could learn things from it. For example, he talked about how our eyes are trained to look at the white male first and see the women and her clothing to judge the status of the family. But the viewers eyes ignore the African American child who is placed further back in the painting, hidden like a shadow. Kaphar explains how the public can learn about the white people in the painting but the painting tells us nothing about the boy and his life.  Art history is powerful and it makes people think of the past, present and future. Art leads to questions and allows for conversations that approach change. Kaphar talks about how painting is a  language and that in paintings are coded and meaningful messages.

in these two body paragraph I tried to add in my own opinions through my writing and added better analysis points.