In “They Say I Say” I read a chapter on introduction paragraphs. My main goal of the revision process is to come out with a stronger thesis. To develop a strong thesis you need your introduction paragraph to flow into it. I need to remember to not write the paper in the standard five paragraph format. I have more freedom in this academic essay to really state my opinion. To do this I need to incorporate more background and my own thoughts into my introduction so I can build off them later. After my conference I received helpful information to make a stronger argument that has a better connection to me. My introduction was weak at first now I have a plan to make it stronger.“They Say I say” helps and can be used as helpful hints when you are stuck on how to improve your paper.